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The various ways to Mornington Crescent
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Across the moon a blade-like cloud, incessant


Ok, ignore last night's sarcasm, Andrew. I'm on board. I'm using incessant as a pre-modifying adjective and instigating an ABBA rhyme perhaps. Next!
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Across the moon a blade-like cloud, incessant

...I'm using incessant as a pre-modifying adjective and instigating an ABBA rhyme perhaps. Next!
ABBA, Mark? So the next line would have to rhyme with ''of''? Hmm...

My Penguin Rhyming Dictionary offers only Pavlov, thereof, whereof, hereof, Rostov (Russian port), Baal Shem Tov (Jewish religious leader).

Not a lot of scope there...

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Manhattan, Margarita, Molotov

Molotov being a proper noun, innit.
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Well, Jayne, given how random the finished product will inevitably be, I think 'Baal Shem Tov' would be a great rhyme. Or 'mazel tov' to continue the Jewish theme!

(Or indeed 'Molotov' Ann)
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Molotov being a proper noun, innit.
Somewhat rhyme-driven, though!

But this is a fun exercise, not The Deep End, thankfully

We cross-posted, Mark.
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Well, yes. Bless it, the rhyme was all it had to drive it, the only star toward which my runaway train might steer... And the only one that slipped unbidden into my noggin since I don't have a rhyming Penguin*.

Blame Mark.

* Does anyone?
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Now this is the spirit!

Ann, nice job landing that rhyme that I clearly didn't set you up for.
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Whose are these bones whose bones we keep?
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I'm using incessant as a pre-modifying adjective and instigating an ABBA rhyme perhaps.
'Perhaps'! I gave you a get out clause Ann. Anyway, I'm sure the poem will be all the better for the Molotov.

Edit: Ah, I thought this would be up Walter's street..

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