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Old 07-22-2018, 11:07 AM
Susan McLean Susan McLean is offline
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John, I've thought about your questions. I rather need "room" in the first case for the rhyme, but also one thinks of a room as being enclosed, whereas a space could be anywhere. I think of "twilight" as a time of day, but of "darkening" as an ongoing process. I rather like the implication that as it gets darker, that suits the boy better, both because of his own withdrawn tendencies and because it signals that the mother will be arriving soon (it is implied that that is part of the routine of their life). I am always glad to hear your take on these translations, though, and to reconsider why I made choices that were relatively instinctive at first.

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Old 07-22-2018, 01:58 PM
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My pleasure, Susan - glad to be of help! I agree, English lacks an obvious word for enclosed space other than room. Maybe somethingl ike chamber has possibilities?

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