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Old 07-27-2018, 10:57 AM
Andrew Szilvasy Andrew Szilvasy is offline
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Cut-up of the Exquisite Corpse 2 poem, lightly edited: punctuation, cut some the's, changed some tenses, combined some prepositions when the were next to each other, or when another one would make some sense--I let the original stand unless I couldn't even get a surreal meaning. Changed the "a" in "clatter" to a "u" because of the phrase the cut up generated. Cut about 2 phrases the cut up generated that I couldn't make fit naturally. I left it in the order it gave me.
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The grave for Possibly: corpses, possibly
that jeune Jeanne Lucasia.

Look the other mute with all didn’t find me,
mucking about in his own autoclave.

The laureate reformats the shards.
Sirens suddenly go looking for my mind—

the indifferent way the sidewalk in Patmos
passed away in peace…

You didn't understand above the root.
I crawled into the microwave.

Clutters and white divans with lay
upon a round in sunlight,

it shatters beside the carry-on.
So heaves and cracks of lab glass somehow try to.

You do Chardonnay, Overnight Caller,
except perhaps for dark? The hooting dark.

To each of the cosmic hallmarks strewn across
the here-we-are. He smokes. And her eye? What?
I have to say I quite like some of this.
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Old 07-27-2018, 02:45 PM
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Ann Drysdale Ann Drysdale is offline
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Never mind, eh...

Last edited by Ann Drysdale; 08-05-2018 at 11:24 AM.
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Old 07-27-2018, 03:10 PM
Roger Slater Roger Slater is online now
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This is a found poem.
I found it when I was trying to think
of the combination to
my gym locker; it was sitting
right behind a never-used recipe
for homemade horse radish, stuck
there like a wad of gum,
so I took it out, dusted
it off, sanded its edges,
and pushed it onstage
to sing its simply silly song
and deeply bow in gratitude
for having been found,
unlike my gym locker combination.
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Old 07-27-2018, 06:13 PM
Jim Moonan Jim Moonan is offline
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What is and is not found poetry gets dubiouser and dubiouser with every post.
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Old 07-27-2018, 09:18 PM
Edmund Conti Edmund Conti is offline
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Another dubious one--

Answers to a game I found in a newspaper insert. Just added some spacing. It was titled "The Middle Son."

The Middle Son

Poi son ous
Ar son ist
Pri son er.
Super son ic
Per son able
Rea son able
Re son ant
Per son ality.
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Old 07-27-2018, 11:02 PM
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Allen Tice Allen Tice is offline
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Nice one, Conti. Also Slater’s, which I remember from the solid-state “Light”. Laughed then, laughed now. << {In all capital letters.}
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