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Old 08-26-2018, 02:21 PM
Susan McLean Susan McLean is offline
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Martin, my main objection is that the "and" in the last line helps to create a solemn and (to my mind) biblical rhythm that adds resonance to the meaning of it. It may mean the same thing without the "and," but some of the power of the line is lost.

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