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Joe Crocker

03-05-2025 07:44 AM

Hilarly Biehl, Autmn Sky

Hilary has a poem "Icarus at the amusement park" in to-day's Autumn Sky. Killer last line.

Susan McLean

03-05-2025 10:05 AM

Excellent poem, Hilary.

Susan

Julie Steiner

03-05-2025 02:14 PM

Wow. The last two lines are fantastic. I also enjoyed the "something's gone wrong" effect of the slant-rhyming between stanzas. Kudos, Hilary!

Hilary Biehl

03-05-2025 02:38 PM

Thank you Joe, and Susan and Julie!

Glenn Wright

03-05-2025 05:31 PM

Fine work, Hilary.

Glenn

James Brancheau

03-06-2025 12:13 AM

Terrific, Hilary. “rib by rib” is an amazing moment, and so is that closing line. The whole poem is striking—love it. Congratulations!

Hilary Biehl

03-06-2025 04:36 PM

Thank you, Glenn and James.

Matt Q

03-07-2025 02:10 AM

Congrats Hilary!

Great poem. The amusement park metaphor works really well, and what a close!

Matt

Rick Mullin

03-07-2025 11:36 AM

Wonderful. Congrats!
RM

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