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Unread 06-11-2024, 06:54 AM
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I guess what I most like about ghazals, what I think makes them work when I think they work, is the non-narrative -- or at least the non-linear/non-sequential approach, in which a series of facets of something are presented, that though connected and suggesting a narrative also seem to function independently.
If I do another ghazal, and I’d like to, that advice will be very much on my mind.

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Actually, it might be worth playing with changing the order of all the shers not just those -- assuming you haven't already done so -- and see what happens. You could even print them, cut them out and rearrange them even, maybe even face down (the paper, not you!).
That’s what Cally suggested. She even did it, she said, and got some interesting results, so I’m curious, but I’d rather let the poem blur a little in my mind before trying it.

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On S1, each time I've read it, I've wanted it as two sentences. … I think because it makes the second sentence more emphatic.
I’ll have to let that sink in, but I may well decide you’re right. I generally do.
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