Hi, Rick—
It’s funny you should mention the end stops. They were not originally deliberate, and when I noticed them I tried to break them up, but then I decided that I liked the contrast in tempo between the end stops and enjambments coinciding with octet and sestet. I also liked the quicker pace after the mention of the running in L8. Since this is a “skinny sonnet” in tetrameter, it’s easy to fall into the trap of goose stepping in march time, and the end stops only make it worse.
I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Glenn
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