I think it was wise to revert on L2. I like "snuffles" but "vacuums" worked for me too. I wasn't picturing a literal vacuum, just a very enthusiastic dog taking in the scenery. I generally like semicolons, but I am not sure you need them here.
Agree with Simon that ultimately you need to decide what you prefer. Coming back in a few days with fresh eyes is often the best way to do that.
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