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Unread 03-03-2025, 11:15 AM
Nick McRae Nick McRae is offline
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I agree, it just felt a little off to me. Matt's mileage may vary.
Putting on my pedant shoes and thinking a little further about it, I think my issue is that it feels a little too strong in it's context without really adding much value to the line. It draws unwanted focus when I think you want that modifier to be a little more fluid and cohesive with the line.

People do describe snow as fat, and maybe it's more common in certain regions, but it's not a term I hear too often. So to me it's not completely out of the ordinary, but maybe a touch of an unusual descriptor which I found distracting.

My pedantic two cents.
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