Hi David,
I'll add to the praise given so far. Highly enjoyable for its wit and take on the evolutionary ladder. I was wondering how another colon in place of the comma would work after "Later." I felt I hesitated the slightest bit at that place in my reading in first making sense of the shift between time periods. I see that Trevor suggested a stanza break there.
All the best,
Jim
Last edited by Jim Ramsey; 03-28-2025 at 10:20 AM.
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