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Unread 03-28-2025, 10:17 AM
Jim Ramsey Jim Ramsey is offline
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Hi David,

I'll add to the praise given so far. Highly enjoyable for its wit and take on the evolutionary ladder. I was wondering how another colon in place of the comma would work after "Later." I felt I hesitated the slightest bit at that place in my reading in first making sense of the shift between time periods. I see that Trevor suggested a stanza break there.

All the best,
Jim

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