Great fun, Joe. I agree with Rich about the James Brown reference. In fact I think the whole thing would be improved if you could stick to four-line verses. Shows discipline, you see.
You probably had little chance of winning over the Poetry Society with something like this - not really their thing, I imagine - but your covering letter would certainly have put the kibosh on it.
I'd like to read a revised version of it, though, even if they wouldn't.
Cheers
David
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