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Unread 07-29-2019, 03:39 PM
Aaron Poochigian Aaron Poochigian is offline
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Matt, thank you for your thorough critiques. I will respond first to your first comments. Yes, "hanger" and "anger" are a true rhyme for me.

you are right about "have to deal with" sucking.

I have revised that line to

"and have to hide from his investors' anger"

Thank you very much,

Aaron
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