Eratosphere Forums - Metrical Poetry, Free Verse, Fiction, Art, Critique, Discussions Able Muse - a review of poetry, prose and art

Forum Left Top

Reply
Thread Tools Display Modes
  #1  
Unread 02-06-2013, 02:04 PM
Jayne Osborn's Avatar
Jayne Osborn Jayne Osborn is offline
Administrator
 
Join Date: Jan 2010
Location: Middle England
Posts: 7,199
Default The Oldie "Thirteen" comp results. **Wins for Bazza and Lance**

Thirteen was certainly not unlucky for four Spherians. Congratulations to Bazza and Lance for 50% of the winning words (a 13-liner too, Lance - nice one!) and also to Martin E and Frank for earning Honourable Mentions with their clever mathematical poems. Well done, guys!

(Next comp on new thread.)

Jayne



xxxxxxxxxThe Oldie Competition
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxby Tessa Castro

IN COMPETITION No 159 you were invited to write a poem with the title ‘Thirteen’. I admired Philip Cram’s audacity in rhyming ‘cornflakes’ with
‘vitamin AB complex’. Martin Elster celebrated the Fibonacci series of numbers, observable in flowers: one, two, three, five, eight, thirteen. Frank Osen’s mind was also running on a series: ‘Like 2 and 67 and 281 and 983, 13 is prime.’ ‘You missed out on the clock face and the months of the year,’ wrote Martin Stote, addressing the number dismissively, ‘The age we can marry, the bars on a gate.’
Two competitors, Linda René-Martin and K P Poole, celebrated the glories of the No 13 bus. But G M Davis’s 13-yearold narrator, torn between incest and parricide, took refuge in ‘Computer games and porn. / Without them I might feel regret / At ever being born.’
Commiserations to them and congratulations to those below, each of whom wins £25, with a bonus prize of a Chamber’s Biographical Dictionary going to Basil Ransome-Davies – who last won 13 issues ago.

Not every motel has a room thirteen but this one did.
I wasn’t superstitious when I drove out there and hid,
The wilds of west Kentucky, fifty miles from Bowling Green,
A run-down row of units, small and squat and not too clean.
The calendar was yesteryear’s, the desk clerk was on dope,
But backwoods anonymity was now my only hope.
I owed a mobbed-up bookie and the cops were on my case
And someone’s jealous spouse had sworn to massacre my face.
With a bottle of Wild Turkey and a bluesteel thirty-eight
I switched the mono TV on, prepared to face my fate.
Could it be annihilation, by the bullet or the noose?
I lived the vital moment, existential as Camus.
My pursuers soon found me. One by one I watched them fall.
They had vowed to take their vengeance and my pistol killed them all.
So thirteen was unlucky for that ill-assorted crew
And blood flowed like a crimson flood, but what’s a girl to do?
Basil Ransome-Davies

O for a draft of the Hippocrene
the day before I turn thirteen
To bolster me for coming years
When my hurly-burly man appears.
Oh, if he must let him come so
that we’re twin compasses who know
when each leg must and must away.
When one’s alone alone t’will stay,
Childhood one, the man the other,
The man, who beams at his little brother
and kisses him with a strong good-bye,
no more to tell the ancient lie
that the child is father to the man.
Lance Levens

At age thirteen you’re in-between,
Neither one thing nor ’tother,
Lanky, gawky, inky, chalky,
Mistaken for your brother.
Flat of feet and flat of chest
What a sight you look undressed.
No curves, no curls, like other girls,
The sexiness is lacking.
That silky dress, with lace no less,
On you looks just like sacking.
So many things you’re not allowed
Driving, drinking, smoking,
You cannot even buy a knife
To slit your throat – I’m joking!
Think ‘tempus fugit’, what I mean
In twelve months’ time you’ll be fourteen!
Mary Hodges

Being thirteen years old is a peculiar time,
like a story told in a thirteen-syllable line
and not rhyming properly. At a village hall fête
in the war, my mother served tea while I hung about,
bored, looking at the raffle prizes (a handknitted
hot water bottle cover, some raffia-knotted
bunches of radishes) and then – heavens! – a rabbit
in a hen-coop. Silky brown fur. I had to have it,
simply had to. My rabbit – it was already mine –
was also for raffling, and Ticket Number Thirteen
cost all my pocket money. So then I rushed back home
and Dad said he’d build a hutch. But when my ticket won,
he groaned. My mother sighed and asked, ‘Did you really think
he could?’ The rabbit had a P&O cabin trunk,
wire-netting-topped. It was difficult to understand
why no one trusted the winning number in my hand.
Alison Prince
Reply With Quote
  #2  
Unread 02-06-2013, 02:54 PM
Jayne Osborn's Avatar
Jayne Osborn Jayne Osborn is offline
Administrator
 
Join Date: Jan 2010
Location: Middle England
Posts: 7,199
Default

In addition to my few words at the top of the thread, I just want to say another "Well done" to you all, and a few more words...

Specifically to Lance, Martin and Frank (I'm sure you won't mind, Bazza): Have you ever seen a copy of The Oldie? Are you subscribers? If the answer to both these questions is 'No', and if you wish, I can either:

a) send you the current copy or

b) give you a gift subscription (these are ludicrously cheap to attendees of The Oldie lunches!).

PM or email me with your postal addresses if you're interested in either of the above.

I love The Oldie, not just for the terrific magazine and the marvellous lunches but, like Eratosphere, it has furnished me with some of the best friends I've ever had. (Sniff!)

Jayne

Added in: Congrats to Alison too, who's also a member; I didn't know, sorry.
Reply With Quote
  #3  
Unread 02-06-2013, 08:45 PM
Lance Levens Lance Levens is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Dec 2003
Location: Savannah, GA 31405
Posts: 4,055
Default

Thanks, Jayne, for the offer. I wouldn't mind a subscription.
Reply With Quote
  #4  
Unread 02-07-2013, 02:27 AM
Brian Allgar Brian Allgar is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Apr 2012
Location: Paris, France
Posts: 5,502
Default

Congratulations to everyone - 75% of the winners, and a couple of HMs. An exceptional result!

I particular enjoyed Basil's piece, which gave me the feeling (an extremely rare one for me, suffering as I do from an advanced case of Competitor's Conceit) of having been fairly and squarely outclassed.

Last edited by Brian Allgar; 02-07-2013 at 02:32 AM.
Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks


Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



Forum Right Top
Forum Left Bottom Forum Right Bottom
 
Right Left
Member Login
Forgot password?
Forum LeftForum Right


Forum Statistics:
Forum Members: 8,510
Total Threads: 22,638
Total Posts: 279,205
There are 1372 users
currently browsing forums.
Forum LeftForum Right


Forum Sponsor:
Donate & Support Able Muse / Eratosphere
Forum LeftForum Right
Right Right
Right Bottom Left Right Bottom Right

Hosted by ApplauZ Online