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Unread 07-14-2015, 06:33 AM
Duncan Gillies MacLaurin Duncan Gillies MacLaurin is offline
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Default Stallings, "The Trials of Greece"

Alicia has just posted the start of a Canto of hers here. Wonderful stuff!

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PS Dear Mod, please correct my title!
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Thank you Duncan! Great work. Funny as well (darkly).

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Not entirely sure about the punning ending--"Bull" for "bull$#!t has mythological resonance but loses the important explosive power of the actual swear word. But that's a quibble in a section of a poem that indicates a new, fruitful direction for Alicia.
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The "Bull" at the end is a clever pun, imo, and added to the force of the ending.

I greatly enjoyed this, and could easily have gone on for more of it.
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This is much more clever than the law allows.

I luv it! Snarky, full of good stuff (like Porphyrius the Charioteer [he's only implicit, though]). La la. No need for imbecilic coprolalia.
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No need for imbecilic coprolalia.
I love a gratuitous insult in the afternoon!
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Great, Duncan, thanks. First-rate. Glad to see a long-time favorite in st. 6 -- though some on this site took offense.
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Thanks for the shout-out, Duncan.

Love that docta puella.

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Unread 07-15-2015, 04:57 PM
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"How bitter-sweet is/Poetry" indeed. This is masterful -- simultaneously comic and tragic, ancient and modern, foreign and domestic.

I'm persnickety enough to wonder aloud whether that delightful "occupation" joke would work in German and/or Greek. Of course, native speakers of those two languages might have only English in common, so maybe we should all just forget I mentioned it.
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Just wonderful, all the way through. And thanks, Duncan, for the call-out.
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