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Unread 04-01-2009, 03:23 AM
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On Jones Street every house is painted white,
each door is white, and every yard adheres
to certain rules: the grass at ankle-height,
an apple blossom tree bent toward the sun,
a single bush trimmed squat and round and so
symmetrically it seems manmade. No one
can deviate from others in the row.
How easily I lose myself out here.
Even the dog can barely sniff his way
back from the park. Was it a left we took?
A right? Perhaps it’s safer just to stay
indoors than go off course again. Oh, look—
another flag, another garden gnome,
another sign proclaiming Home, Sweet Home.



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Suburbia always gets a bad rap, probably out of ordinary snobbism. The dog walks away with this poem.
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Unread 04-01-2009, 03:31 AM
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Even the street is nondescript. Jones Street. The predominant color, actually the absence of color, is – and must be -- white. The strict military order of the place and the things in it is wonderfully overstated. But the people? Not a chance. One’s eyes and heart are caught by the mention of apple blossoms, a tree/flower not lightly considered by the poet, I suspect. Such a contrast, the blossoms symbolize love, youth, beauty, happiness and promise. The double meaning of losing oneself perfectly ends the octave.

And yet, the housing compound is merely a backdrop to the larger question, that of taking chances, of trying to find one’s way in life, where “even a dog” would find it difficult.

Finally, the killer couplet. All those “anothers” and the all-important verb “proclaiming”, what Edward Arlington Robinson called “the perfect word that is the poet’s wand.” The mastery, not only of the form, the language and the music, but of the spirit of the sonnet, is exemplified in what, at first reading, may seem a very quiet, homey, and unassuming poem. Not so.

This poem broke my heart.
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'Yard' rather than 'garden' tells me this is by an American poet - hmmm, I'm working on it. I don't share Catherine's melancholy, I rather like estates where all the houses look the same. A nice piece though, memorable.
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I agree that the dog makes the poem. This is a poem with a light-ish surface and a core of steel. No chinks here. I really enjoyed the final rhyme as well--completely unforced and original.

Austin
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Unread 04-01-2009, 06:55 AM
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I've never encountered a poem before that so perfectly describes a legislated sameness and conformity. Nature has no business here, nor creativity, nor ingenuity ... it's a nightmare scene, made all the eerier because it describes a place where people actually live. The details are well chosen and the plainspoken diction is a foil for the horrors it disguises. That this sterile place is described with such artistry is the only reason to hope.
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Because this is Navy Housing, I am reading this as a stalwart attempt to make a "Home, Sweet Home" by people who often relocate.

Perhaps it’s safer just to stay
indoors than go off course again.


These lines might express a (momentary?) wish for individuality, rather than the regulated military scene (where even the lawn grass has military haircuts). This sonnet is about wanting normality, stability, longing for that little deviation from a "sameness" which is is quite different than the sameness of a dormitory suburbia.

What symbol is more military than a flag? What symbol is further from the military life than a garden gnome?

Supurb closure.

another flag, another garden gnome,
another sign proclaiming Home, Sweet Home.
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Unread 04-01-2009, 08:32 AM
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Is David Lynch competing? Wow!

I had a mixed reaction to this. Technically, it's superb. Everything is well handled, the voice is pitch perfect, it's creepy and eerie and well done. My only nit would be that, with the empasis on uniformity, you want to get those iambs bumping into place at the start, not leading with a ("Jones Street") spondee, unless that's deliberate - the David Lynch signal that something's wrong on Jones Street. Assuming it's not, I'd suggest:

On Adams Street each house is painted white,
all doors are white....

My objection is that it's been done. Over and over. In articles and stories and films, if not specifically in a sonnet. So much skill - but nothing new is said. A+ for execution, C for originality.

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Unread 04-01-2009, 09:40 AM
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I disagree with my tall friend from Plum Island. I am not nearly so well read as Michael. I had never seen this, until it came in over the hooper, but I instantly knew whose it was. There is a technical term, "litotes," which Alan and I came to grips with when translating the Wulf. It means "heroic understatement." I suspect the author of this poem is a young woman married to a naval officer protecting us in the Persian Gulf. Litotes. And yes, Mr. Casssity, the dog runs away with the poem.
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Unread 04-01-2009, 09:47 AM
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Please everybody, don't start showing off by giving away who the authors might or might not be. Even though we think we know, stay mum. It can't be helped, the idea of who the author might be colors the comments of those who come after.

The poem, the whole poem and nothing but the poem.

Puh-LEEZ.
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Unread 04-01-2009, 10:01 AM
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Not only the dog -- but also the closing couplet makes the poem, as the struggle for what Janice called the normality of deviation is emphasized so movingly in the last two lines: Oh, look, another garden gnome stuck out there in the yard, and yet another sign proclaiming "Home Sweet Home" --
The residents' vain little attempts at distinction are failing so utterly.
Unlike Michael, I think the opening line puts the metrical emphasis just where it belongs, landing rather heavily on "Jones Street" and "every".
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