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Unread 01-12-2010, 12:59 PM
Donna English Donna English is offline
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Wolves in sheeps clothing, anyone?

Here's one to start


I read your poem “Be Vegan” this morning, and gasped. It took my breath away! The ow/cow rhyme choked me up, tears ran down my cheeks. I knew, once I’d recovered and continued reading, that I didn’t want to eat any more bacon and eggs.

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Unread 01-12-2010, 07:01 PM
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I read your poem, "Come Hither, Darkness," and finally understood what it means to be depressed.
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Unread 01-13-2010, 12:50 PM
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I read your poem "Aubade", but I thought it was worse than that,
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Unread 01-13-2010, 05:32 PM
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I read your poem, "Insomnia," and suggest that you change the title to "The Cure."
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Unread 01-13-2010, 06:00 PM
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Dear Joe - your sonnet on the tiresome drone of much formal verse speaks for itself.

Alternate version: "essay on the pretentious drone of many contemporary academics"

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Unread 01-13-2010, 06:05 PM
Donna English Donna English is offline
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Roger, Peter, Michael you guys, have no idea how much I needed a laugh tonight, thanks!


Hello Reggie, The brilliance of line S1L3

“Her skin glistened, luminous with sparkling starshine and moonbeams”

is evident to anyone with eyes. The imagery is seared on my retinas,
and lights the dark apartment of my mind.
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