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Unread 01-18-2010, 02:55 PM
Donna English Donna English is offline
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We had a lot of fun with a communal poem a few years ago. http://www.ablemuse.com/erato/showthread.php?t=5175

John, said it was okay to go ahead and get a new one going.

Rhyming couplets, one couplet at a time, please. Try to keep the meter.
To keep all of the previous lines and continuity, reply with quote would probably work best.
Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Donna

Here's the first couplet to start things off.


The midnight knock is followed by a voice,
a raspy bass, “Hey, open up, it’s Joyce!”
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The midnight knock is followed by a voice,
a raspy bass, “Hey, open up, it’s Joyce!”
"Tell me, do you mean the Joyce who's fame's
based on Trees, or are we talking James?"
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The midnight knock is followed by a voice,
a raspy bass, “Hey, open up, it’s Joyce!”
"Tell me, do you mean the Joyce whose fame's
based on Trees, or are we talking James?"
"To write" she answered "was my dearest wish;
but I should say I am in fact a fish..."
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Originally Posted by David Anthony View Post
The midnight knock is followed by a voice,
a raspy bass, “Hey, open up, it’s Joyce!”
"Tell me, do you mean the Joyce whose fame's
based on Trees, or are we talking James?"
"To write" she answered "was my dearest wish;
but I should say I am in fact a fish..."
I cracked the door, and saw that line 2's "bass"
should not have rhymed with "face", but "[something crass]".

Last edited by Julie Steiner; 01-18-2010 at 06:20 PM. Reason: got my mouth washed out with soap
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[quote=David Anthony;139348]The midnight knock is followed by a voice,
a raspy bass, “Hey, open up, it’s Joyce!”
"Tell me, do you mean the Joyce whose fame's
based on Trees, or are we talking James?"
"To write" she answered "was my dearest wish;
but I should say I am in fact a fish..."

I cracked the door, and saw that line 2's "bass"
should not have rhymed with "face", but "[something crass]".
I'm cursed by TYPO, keeper of the keys
I'd beg for help, but I do not have knees.
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[quote=Donna English;139352]
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Originally Posted by David Anthony View Post
The midnight knock is followed by a voice,
a raspy bass, “Hey, open up, it’s Joyce!”
"Tell me, do you mean the Joyce whose fame's
based on Trees, or are we talking James?"
"To write" she answered "was my dearest wish;
but I should say I am in fact a fish..."

I cracked the door, and saw that line 2's "bass"
should not have rhymed with "face", but "[something crass]".
I'm cursed by TYPO, keeper of the keys
I'd beg for help, but I do not have knees.
I thought I knew the face, but wasn't sure:
"Hey -- is this Joyce the Mermaid at the door?"
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