[Maryann Corbett]

I read the final couplet as hexameters, for what that's worth. A variation on the tradition of a final hexameter line in some forms.

[ross hamilton hill]

he grits…….then the teeth are on the next line like they were false and fell out, no… it's too complicated, trying to do too much, and losing the melodic structure towards the end. It becomes comic she wait- ??? what, she is so fat she's used as ballast.

[Cyn Neely]

I guess I like this one as a sonnet best so far. (but I enjoyed reading #2 more)

But surely this is not about a crash. It is about the foggy snow-blind mind of an old man in dementia that used to be a trucker.

If this was about a crash I would find it awful, but I like the turn at the end.

I am still waiting for a sonnet to knock my socks off though.

[Janice D. Soderling]

I too read this as an old trucker who suffers from dementia.

[Quincy Lehr]

The problem with the title is, in part, that there's a far better-known piece that GOES LIKE THIS. Man, I love Sabbath!

[Brian Watson]

"He drags his feet" is an unfortunate figure of speech.

[Roger Slater]

I didn't take it as a figure of speech. I took it literally.

[Mary Meriam]

I like the old man of the truck.

[Eileen Cleary]

I read this as a nursing home resident trying to get back home and confusing his wheelchair with a truck, perhaps having some hallucinations (deer.) That’s why the deer are gone as he approaches. He wants to go home to stay.

He has difficulty controlling his wheelchair outside and ultimately doesn’t get far.
They find him parked beside the door, and wheel him,
unwilling, to his room.
He remains desperate to return to the wife of his reality.

Oh, and I thought that he dragged his feet because they weren't on the footrests of the wheelchair.

[Martin Elster]

I like this one the best so far.