[Hilary Biehl]

Well, I assumed that the car had stopped in the road because there was a large bird in the way. I seem to be in the minority though.

[James Brancheau]

I assumed the same as Hilary. And I liked the realization that the headlights were acting as if they were stage lights. I enjoyed the scene slowly coming into focus.

[John Riley]

I like it. It has a charm and is witty. I see nothing to say beyond what has been said. It doesn't bother me that he takes in so much while driving.

[Jim Moonan]

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Originally Posted by David Callin

...maybe I can do something with the title ... "Stopping by birds on a Shakey evening"? Or "Stopped by a bird on a balmy evening"?

That would be the quickest fix. (I'm never sure if your thread titles are also the poem titles) Perhaps there's a witty Shakespearean-like title that could tie the two "performances" together.

But as is, it doesn't detract from the poem, and in a theatricall way asks the audience/reader to suspend reality and join the alternate reality onstage/on the page — which is pretty cool.

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[David Callin]

Originally Posted by Hilary Biehl

Well, I assumed that the car had stopped in the road because there was a large bird in the way. I seem to be in the minority though.

Thank you Hilary! (And James and John, to the same effect.) I'm glad it's gettable from the poem.

Jim, I would like a witty title. But I haven't found one yet. I'm glad you think it's not too much of a problem for the poem.

Cheers all

David

Exeunt omnes