Congratulations on your maiden voyage, Paula. Your sonnet is resonant and full of heart. You take a well-worn conceit—the voyage on the sea of life—and explore its corners and crannies in a fresh and interesting way. Having been an oarsman on life’s boat for most of my life, enjoying the fellowship and resenting the limitation, I can understand the speaker’s desire to set out on her own course.
I share Carl’s qualified admiration of your metrical gymnastics. I wonder, though, if you could add the last foot to line 14 (perhaps a 2-syllable adjective to describe “fingers?” aching? restless?)
Very impressive debut! Welcome!
Glenn
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