[Carl Copeland]

Originally Posted by Mark McDonnell

"What ghosts, what galaxies, fall down the cracks" was still tetrameter, I'm sure. David prefers galaxies and maybe you do too?

Mark, “fall down,” like “grew up,” is a phrasal verb normally stressed on the preposition. That’s how I got pentameter. HOWEVER, accents can be shifty, and I don’t rule out the pronunciation “fall down the cracks.” I didn’t get it, but others may. I do miss “galaxies,” but sustaining the marine motif is also nice. I’m on the fence.