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Unread 02-11-2025, 06:55 AM
Nick McRae Nick McRae is offline
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Default Italian Mountain

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Italian Mountain

Sorrowful eyes.
A heart longing for an italian mountain.
A village of mandolin and painting
a horizon of feathered gold.

At night she dreams of the beautiful one.
But he fades. She wakes.

A life diminished
by the sea that cannot break free.
It's tide husked by the moon.
Swelling, only to recede.
Her love contained.

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Italian Mountain

Sorrow filled eyes.
A heart longing for an italian mountain.
A village of mandolin and painting,
a horizon of feathered gold.

At night she dreams of the beautiful one.
But he fades. She wakes.

A life diminished,
by the sea that cannot break free.
It's tide husked by the moon.
Swelling, only to recede.
Her love contained.

Last edited by Nick McRae; 02-20-2025 at 07:10 AM.
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