[Tom Jardine]

I am beginning to see what this poem is about. = Have you been taking your medicine?

You have written better poems than this. = You have written better poems than this in your previous life.

This poem needs a little more action, more liveliness. = How long have you been dead?

I was saddened to read this poem about the tragic, slow death of your 99 year-old father. = Well, that certainly was gruesome! Please, no more dead relative poems.

I love the many classical references in this poem. = So, I see you haven't had many real tragedies in your own life yet. Just wait.



[This message has been edited by Tom Jardine (edited July 10, 2005).]