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Unread 05-14-2014, 01:11 PM
L.M. Price L.M. Price is offline
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Though I could wish for a more specific scene, I think the genericness (is that a word?) of the description is meant to tie into the 'everywhere/anywhere' of later on. Anywhere is the same as anywhere else without 'you' there.
My nits are 'or to experience'. It seems an awkward way of stating the idea.
And 'this land from everything', which isn't true - there is trash and, presumably, seagulls, dogs and joggers, and, unless it's a very small island, more land behind the speaker. But I can understand that the feeling is that of being cut off from everything, whether literally accurate or not.
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