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Unread 05-03-2024, 10:59 AM
John Boddie John Boddie is offline
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For me, the last line seems an afterthought. As such, it diminishes the strength of the preceding strophe. The shift from "she" back to "I" is a minor speed bump.

As for getting published in The New Yorker, it seems that luck plays a significant role. Many pieces I've seen there aren't as good as this one.

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