Hi Matt,
So the problem for you is that I don’t show how the male gaze of the narrator is shared by builders of the cut. That is fair comment, I guess. A problem here is that I’m trying to analyse my own poem by adding a post-hoc rationalisation. When I wrote it, I just put in what felt right. I had two impulses. The first verse is an image of the rounded shapely Chiltern hills and the second is about the man-made road cut through them. What links the two things is a male swagger, a kind of lust. I don’t want to get all psycho-analytic because I wouldn’t know wtf I was talking about. But there does seem to be some sort of underlying drive that links these things. Likely, I have failed to show it.
Cheers
Joe
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