I'm sorry for your losses, John. My much-loved aunt recently died of breast cancer after fighting it for decades. It was devastating.
I didn't think the struggle was just flowers/no flowers or that it was superficial and obvious. I do think there might be ways you can bring it out more and get closer to your intentions though. There are probably better words than "bright," "sunny and fair" etc. But what you have here struck a chord with me in spite of that.
I don't feel like I'm adequately articulating my thoughts in this thread, and I'm trying to avoid getting overly personal but not sure how to convey my response to this poem without getting personal. Sorry.
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