[Glenn Wright]

Hi, Jayne—

I like the new revision a lot. Your speaker seems much more confident and the gentle humor, although self-directed, is more self-accepting. The poem has evolved into a beautiful tribute to your husband.

The reference to Princess Diana keeps the reader in suspense about the nature of the “love triangle” throughout the octet, which, I think, is very effective. It also allows you to bring the poem back full circle, from two, to three, to two again.

Glenn