[Mark McDonnell]

Rev

This Is Where We Came In

“It isn’t what I’d call a picture show,
this CGI…AI…it’s all the same,
all bouncing spandex arseholes. Such a shame
we lost the morse code pulse of RKO —
a title card and off! A silhouette
and there’s your man, but doomed you see, some double-
crossing dame, smoking, built for trouble.
— How long’s this flick? Christ, when did they forget
how bladders work? An hour and a half’s a charm...”

Chiaroscuro blinds that hide a hood
throw shadows black as 1940s blood.
A big shot shot – you're cradled in my arms –
cue sirens and ‘The End’.
…………………………….……..…..”I’m tired now, son.
Nudge me when these flying clowns are done.”



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Various tweaks to punctuation, including speech-marks



This Is Where We Came In

It isn’t what I’d call a picture show,
this CGI…AI…it’s all the same –
all bouncing spandex arseholes – such a shame
they’re feeding kids this stuff. Now, RKO!
A title card and off! A silhouette
and there’s your man, but doomed you see, some double-
crossing dame, smoking, built for trouble…

How long’s this flick? Christ, when did they forget
how bladders work? An hour and a half’s a charm...

Chiaroscuro blinds that hide a hood
throw shadows black as 1940s blood.
A big shot shot – you're cradled in my arms –
cue sirens and ‘The End’.

......................................I’m tired now, son.
Nudge me when these flying clowns are done.
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