[Yves S L]

Hello John,

There has been a bit of a miscommunication. I do not mean to make it more metrical. My point was that "freeverse" can be as constrained as metrical but in a different way.

The rhythm you created is its "own thing" and I am not asking you to make it more "metrical" as if metrical is always superior in some way.

It is possible for someone to mechanically write metrical poems but not really have a feel for rhythm (which is the more foundational skill and metrical poems can become tedious without it).