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Unread 05-26-2025, 07:09 AM
Joe Crocker Joe Crocker is offline
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Self-reflection

I try not to look at myself in the mirror,
and the face that I don’t recognise.
The hopes that I had for it languish and wither.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror.
And this is my vanity. Cracks wanting filler
-- I would rather ignore than revise.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror.
That face. I can’t meet its eyes.



rev 2

Self-reflection

I try not to look at myself in the mirror,
avoiding a face that I don’t recognise.
The hopes that I had for it languish and wither.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror.
And there is my vanity. Cracks wanting filler
are best to ignore than to probe or surprise.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror,
avoiding that face. I can not meet its eyes.




rev 1

Self-reflection

I try not to look at myself in the mirror
and the face I do not recognise.
The hopes that I had for it languish and wither.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror.
And that is my vanity. Cracks wanting filler
-- I would rather ignore than surprise.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror
or that face. I can not meet its eyes.



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I try not to look at myself in the mirror
and the face I do not recognise.
The hopes that I had for it languish and wither.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror.
And that is my vanity. Cracks wanting filler
-- I’d rather ignore than despise.
I try not to look at myself in the mirror.
That face. I cannot meet its eyes.

Last edited by Joe Crocker; 05-27-2025 at 02:20 PM.
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