"Gotten" is the preferred form of the past participle, though "got" is common in speech and most people accept both forms. As for the other aspects of usage Maggie objected to, I assume she is just unfamiliar with them or doesn't care for them herself. My only objections to the piece are that I find myself pausing at the end of lines more than I like, in blank verse, and that I think the lines could use a bit more substitution, to sound more conversational. Other than that, I think it is an effective narrative, and that the reticence works well as characterization.
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