As someone who practices this form on a regular basis, I admire this one greatly. The repeating word -- leaves -- is well chosen and utilized inventively. And like Maryann, I'm most impressed that the writer uses a traditional rhyme scheme (most that I've read don't use a rhyme scheme, though the final couplet is rhymed) and makes clear points in stanzas -- tricky stuff handled very well. I can see why the writer didn't utilize true rhyme in the final couplet -- to mirror the emotional dissonance in the poem, and because there's a rhyme scheme here anyway -- but I miss it. And I guess the last line was the one spot where I wanted to hear the writer's voice clearly, rather than just another echo of Shakespeare. Very well done indeed, though.
Marybeth
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