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Unread 05-18-2012, 11:51 AM
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LUST

If lust's a sin, I love a sin!
The feeling overpowers!
Of course, I'll call the doctor in
if the sin exceeds four hours.
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Unread 05-18-2012, 01:19 PM
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The sin of lust's the best:
although it may be moot,
what good are all the rest
without forbidden fruit?

Avarice is boring:
it's no fun hoarding treasure.
Sloth will keep you snoring;
wrath spikes up your blood pressure.

Envy turns you green,
gluttony gets you fat.
Pride makes you primp and preen
and nobody likes that!

Of all the deadly seven,
it's lust that rings the bell!
If there's no lust in heaven,
Well then, just give me hell!
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Unread 05-18-2012, 01:30 PM
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Well done, Marion, but do you need the first stanza?
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Unread 05-18-2012, 01:37 PM
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GLUTTONY

Let's hear it for gluttony,
the one sin we need!
(I own a few restaurants.
My own sin is greed).
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If it's robust,
with every thrust
I feel it stronger.

I wish your lust
persisted just
a little longer.
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My goodness, Marion's is very strong.

How does one decide which one to send in?
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Unread 05-18-2012, 04:19 PM
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Bob, yes, I think you may be right about the first stanza. I thought maybe I needed to show it was about lust from the get-go. But maybe not?

N.B. The poem does not necessarily reflect the viewpoint of the poet!
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Unread 05-18-2012, 04:25 PM
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I'm being punctilious here, folks, but Lucy does say:

"You are invited to provide a poem in praise of one of the seven deadly sins"

The poems incorporating all of them are very clever, but that's not what's being asked for.

(Only pointing it out, for the record...!)

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I think you can send in two, one under an alias. Is that right, Jayne? Or anyone?
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