[Susan McLean]

I was underwhelmed. Though I immediately caught that it was slant rhymed and felt that the slants fit the subject matter, the "I'm blue because you're not here" message felt pedestrian to me once I parsed it out. By deemphasizing the sonic pleasures of rhyme, the poem left me not much to hold on to but the anti-romantic portrayal of the landscape (which has also been done to death). I did like the same line Gail liked, about the water being a link to everywhere.

Susan