Encountering this poem under other circumstances, we would know the author's name. So I assume the reference to Ann would make some kind of sense (some kind of sonic relationship between the names, some kind of symbolism). If not, then I agree with the folks who've said that it's extraneous.
I'm also not that sold on the conceit here. It feels like one of those too-clever-by-half ideas (my sister and I are a contrasting pair, like the two beats of an iamb!) that doesn't quite work out. But you go ahead and hammer it into a poem anyway, and hope the seams don't show (wait, if I'm the soft beat that follows her strong beat...then aren't we a trochee?) (if a heartbeat has an iambic rhythm...then are two hearts double-iambs?).
It's well executed and there are some nice touches along the way, but I don't think the idea really holds together.
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