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Sylvia, I defy anyone to top that - it's deliciously dark!

A sure winner, I'd say.
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A perfect response to the brief. Brava!
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Thank you both! Dammit, I'll send it...
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Limit: Two Tons

HaHa Two-Ton Sally beats her white drum.
Her teepee thrums thrums power in the night.
A brave and maiden sit nearby. They've come
for help to procreate and Sally's sight

is undisputed. She makes medicine
and ties the couple with a leather strap
together to a pole, serves mescaline
to them there with a wooden spoon. Her lap

is full of potions. Honey locust thorns
are placed in dolls in private places, lit
a little, fire and smoke in them with horns
from buffalo, white and bleached. A snake-bit

chipmunk bleeds out in each; his dying squeal
is mimicked, and Sally, (who barely weighs eighty),
smiles and laughs into the fire where the deal
is done. Their wish is granted and weighty.

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Thank you Peter, I'll consider.
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Quote:
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Sylvia, I defy anyone to top that - it's deliciously dark!

A sure winner, I'd say.
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A perfect response to the brief. Brava!
Thirded.
Wonderful black humour.
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Thanks, Alan!
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Yup. That's the winner, But there are still three other places to fill.
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Excellent, Sylvia! But I won't give it the kiss of death by saying you-know-what.
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