I like this private and quiet little poem. Except for the (Coasters, trivets, raft...) interjection in L8 - which seems forced and awkward - it is very much of a piece, the language is consistent, it has a tone and an approach which I don't see often in sonnets, and because it works it makes the poem memorable. But I would suggest taking another look at L8. Lots of rhymes to play with. Laughed?
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