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10-23-2016, 07:11 AM
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Wow!
Actually, line 12 is the most inspired list item of all, and, if I understand correctly (limits approaching infinity = 2x), a brilliant segue into the final couplet.
This is on the level of Stallings. Bravo o Brava to whoever wrote it.
Editing back to say my initial enthusiasm is waning somewhat . . . still, it's one of the better ones posted so far.
Last edited by Catherine Chandler; 10-24-2016 at 08:34 PM.
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10-23-2016, 08:35 AM
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I remember this poem and who wrote it. It is superb. It is memorable.
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10-23-2016, 09:16 AM
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I xoxo this though I'd prefer if fewer lines were end stopped. Still...
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10-23-2016, 09:28 AM
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Yes, this poem immediately reminds me of Stallings' Sine Qua Non; in that way, it is well-done and a joy to read. However, I don't see the variety of enjambment that the DG suggests (I agree with Orwn's comment), and I'd like to see more of a turn. But this one's in my top two so far.
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10-23-2016, 09:43 AM
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Sorry to be boring, but I have to join the chorus--brilliant. Clever and poignant, and perfectly crafted. I haven't seen it, so I don't know who the author is, but thank you!
p.s. I hope no one minds the irreverence, but the poem did make me recall the joke about the student's answer to a question about the Pythagorean theorem: Here it is!
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10-23-2016, 09:49 AM
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Wow, this is a delightful list poem, with a great turn at the end (which is a real accomplishment in a list poem)! I am impressed with how many different meanings of X the author managed to include, and with how many of them seem to bear added meaning once you reach the end.
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10-23-2016, 10:19 AM
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Devastating poem. I would find this one hard to beat. The DG has upped his game.
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10-23-2016, 12:20 PM
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Simply superb, killer close. The poet is totally in control of this Dakota reader.
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10-24-2016, 11:09 AM
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Lovely list poem, and as the DG observes, does not have a monotonous tone to it.
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10-24-2016, 08:24 PM
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It's a very good poem, but I'm another who feels that it's a bit too clever, that there isn't enough there beyond the cleverness, that the cleverness goes on a bit too long. Strangely (I hope this doesn't bring the wrath of the Sphere down on me) I think I would like it better as a ten-liner - eliminate the first or second stanza.
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