[James Watkins]

I'm with Robin on this one. The poem is nice and neat, skillfully crafted, but I don't see it as something a real person would be thinking and saying after a breakup. I see it more as something a person wanting to write a sonnet about a breakup would say/think. There's no ache, no passion, no urgency. It's clever, and that's it. Also, I'm questioning whether a sonnet that was previously workshopped on Eratosphere, something several people are already familiar with and may have even helped create, should be in a supposedly anonymous contest.

[David Danoff]

This is the sort of thing that strikes me as more clever than moving. It gets somewhere by the end--and I like the end quite a bit--but the first 9 or 10 lines are just an exhibition of virtuosity for its own sake. I don't see that they're doing anything to set up or comment on the personal situation; they're just ringing variations on the theme until it's time for the turn. And the choppiness bugs me, even if it's hard to avoid with a list.