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Originally Posted by Nick McRae
The poem's title drew me in, but I'm not picking up too much meeting a poet in New York at night. The title is atmospheric, and to me hints at an atmospheric poem, but much of the language you used seemed to obscure, not elucidate the atmosphere.
It's an interesting poem, just maybe at odds with the title.
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Thinking a little more on this, what about
Meeting a poet in New York.
Adding 'at night' seems to put special emphasis on nighttime, which the reader might be expecting in the poem, but this poem strikes me as a meeting of two minds, with a few flashes of night. Why not let the nighttime aspect be implied, and let the poem be about you and the other poet?