[W T Clark]

Each component has its strong crystal John, but I'm not quite sure the shifts from declarative vision-speech (first few lines) to Kafkaesque mission (I was tasked) to extraordinary metamorphosis (turned to dust) quite fit into each other. A lovely series of fragments. The final image is transfixing. But I think it needs more room to transition between its modes. It's overly-compressed. I owe you a lot of letters. Eventually debts will be repaid. Write me still: I'm not much here anymore and doubt I will be.

Hope this helps.