Hi Jayne.
Excellent title. I liked the first stanza, but didn't feel things developed sufficiently in the second. The opening sentence of S2 isn't really adding much to what has gone before and I think helps to make the resolution feel rushed (not to mention that 'rules the roost' feels to familiar.) I'd like a bit more about the efforts involved in banishing 'bad'. Might S2 start with 'My husband always tries to make her laugh'?
RG.
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