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03-09-2025, 05:05 PM
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Spring Carnival
on the first Sunday of Lent
epigraph added
It’s springtime once more at my place on the shore,
x an’ the weather’s adorably warm.
There’s a mood in the air of the devil-may-care,
x a desire to repair from the norm.
L2 was: an’ today it’s adorably warm.
An’ obeyin' this urge, all the people emerge
x from their modest auberge or their tent.
It’s so good to rebel from the nebulous hell
x of pretendin' to celebrate Lent.
L3 was: ...the everyday hell
It’s easily seen that everybody’s keen
x to engage in this meaningful life,
even just for the day. They're quite happy to stray
x an’ abandon their prayer an’ strife.
L3-4 were: even just for a day. Quite happily they/ abandon...
On the square in the town the fool gets his crown,
x an’ the lion lies down with the lamb.
An’ isn’t it nice this can simply suffice,
x the sweet paradise that I am?
L1 was: In the centre of town...
Last edited by Duncan Gillies MacLaurin; 03-11-2025 at 09:02 AM.
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03-09-2025, 07:54 PM
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I'd like to buy this busker a drink. Skål!
"pretending to celebrate Lent" cracked me up, and I love "abandon their prayer an’ strife." And the healthy, heretical affirmation of the last two lines.
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03-09-2025, 08:47 PM
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Cheers, Julie!
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03-09-2025, 10:16 PM
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Delightful Duncan and beautifully crafted
Jan
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03-10-2025, 05:14 AM
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Thanks, Jan!
I've tweaked each stanza ever so slightly.
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03-10-2025, 07:47 AM
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Hi Duncan,
very enjoyable, especially the urge/emerge/augerge thread (that thuds to a stop on tent) and the prayer an' strife with its echo of 'trouble an' strife'
RG
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03-10-2025, 08:45 AM
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Thanks, Richard!
Duncan
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