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Here's the first place entry from the last time around:

Jesus "JB" Martinez, Jr. of Del Rio, Texas -USA



( “ Get Lost ” )





You don’t need to tell me that you don’t love me anymore as it’s reading all over your face,

You don’t need to explain yourself, there’s the road, get lost

You don’t need to look back as there is nothing here for you to see, as I hang my head to cry my loudest cry, down by the waterfront as her sweet kisses did.



Not less long only her savage lies to be whipped like a dog; I was better off playing it safe reading Mad Magazines never to unfold love is only for fools thinking it will; Less and later she got fat and me and myself and I we just did not care as the years came flying like there’s no tomorrow as I made it big to create my Own ( You Idiot Magazine ) to enslave the world just like Harry Potter fans too spend there money to no end;

To attack within, going to sea just like a good monster as my aircraft just landed across the good (USA) just like a hungry beast and never mind about ( Global );



Hell, I was a good kid until she got her claws in me as only the ( President ) can lie to you never to get fired just like Paris Hilton and now they ask if she got special treatment. Do I have to spell it out for you? I am not a real doctor but I play one in TV as everything is staged; We pay them to make me look good just like in commercials as women to enjoy cleaning after those pigs with a great smile just to talk about soap; Everything shining white that was in the day of the caveman and now they feed us lies as we are close to dead just like always.

So get lost girl. La End…

And in second place...

Perfect

by Sean Ludwig

I never reach the end of a day
Where I feel I have completed it.
Nothing is done, finished
According to my own mind.
Could be better, could be more
Perfect.
A word which I will never be
Able to rightfully use.
A word which no mortal man has ever or will have enough
Time on Earth to understand.
Only in a place where age
Is non-existent, where moments
Are as eternal as the language
Of the winds- Only in a place
Where time is impossible and movement is infinite
Will perfection really take place.
And to find this place, one must
Look between two pages of a book,
Or underneath a rock where only
Earth could dwell. Then, in that
Second, perhaps one will find
A moment of perfection, and in
The reality of his own thought
Use it to make the right decision.
This, as a contradiction to what
One assumes, could be that very
Timeless place we all seek.
But maybe someday, someone will
Notice it and not let it pass by

Thinking it was just another ordinary moment.

And coming in third...


THE MOON

by Karen M. Wood

AGAINST A CLOUDLESS SKY IT ROSE
ITS LIGHT SHOWN THROUGH THE TREES
BRILLIANTLY ILLUMINING
THE BRANCHES AND ITS LEAVES.

PERFECTLY SERENE AND YET
MAJESTIC WAS ITS GLOW
No MORE TO ME A MYSTERY
FOR GOD I TOO NOW KNOW.

FOR HE HAS MADE ALL THAT WE SEE
IN HEAVENS DOME OF NIGHT
THE STARS THAT SHINE
THE MOON THAT GIVES
THE EARTH ITS NIGHTTIME LIGHT.

Perhaps I'm jaundiced, but none of these pieces strikes me as, well, very good. Is it a question of bad entries or bad taste on the part of the judges? Indeed, a panel is mentioned, but I cannot for the life of me see who is on it.

Quincy

Last edited by Quincy Lehr; 03-15-2010 at 10:37 PM. Reason: A typo after all these years
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