Henry, I think the whole point is whether the irregular lines are pleasing to the ear and mind or not, a subjective call that varies from ear to ear and mind to mind and poem to poem. It is not metrical hair-splitting for me to say that one of those lines bothers me with its missed beat. If the poem "works in effect and sounds good," that's one thing, and apparently it does for you.
As I stated earlier, the long last line might have worked for me if I hadn't been thrown out of the rhythm by the short preceding line. Even that might have worked if the penultimate line hadn't intervened, leaving me with no place to put the other foot down. In short, the variation doesn't work in effect or sound natural for me, and that's what I'm trying to point out.
Carol
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