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Unread 08-25-2005, 06:03 PM
Janet Kenny Janet Kenny is offline
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Mark A,
APOLOGIES. I didn't read you properly. You too and Carol read trimeter.


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Unread 08-25-2005, 08:26 PM
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'Ballad stanza' would imply 4-line verses. 'Ballad measure' could be found in verses any length, or through written, as here. I should have said 'ballad measure' at the outset to make the meaning clearer. These trimeter readings suppress the poem's movement, to my mind. The 4-3 alternation is much more natural. And look at the thing, for heaven's sake! All the odd-numbered lines stick out. You think that's a coincidence?

The poem is very atmospheric, yes, but perhaps not very well executed, metrically speaking.

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Unread 08-25-2005, 09:39 PM
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Originally posted by Alan Sullivan:
'Ballad stanza' would imply 4-line verses. 'Ballad measure' could be found in verses any length, or through written, as here. I should have said 'ballad measure' at the outset to make the meaning clearer. These trimeter readings suppress the poem's movement, to my mind. The 4-3 alternation is much more natural. And look at the thing, for heaven's sake! All the odd-numbered lines stick out. You think that's a coincidence?

The poem is very atmospheric, yes, but perhaps not very well executed, metrically speaking.

Alan
Alan, I don't think those lines stick out. I think they are emphatic and grave and very effective. They pause. I also think that he has used meter effectively and fluidly in the way a good actor speaks Shakespeare or similar. I think we must be very careful to remain open to originality and spontaneity. Not all worthy creations are classifiable nor are all classifiable works worthy, as I think you might agree.
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