I'm with Caleb on the ending (and I think we're talking about the last line and not the whole last stanza) not being lame. It only seems lame. I think the ease of the rhyme and the simplicity of the language undercuts the last line a bit. But on reflection, and after smiling at the ending's humor, I think the line does well. This is no great piece, but it is a good minor lyric.
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