[Philip Quinlan]

Michael

i remember not getting this when you workshopped it here.

I have changed my mind. Maybe I'm more attuned to magical realism these days?

If I may make so bold as to say one thing, though, (and it may be a U.S. / U.K. difference of perspective) I think you underplay the music of the poem in your reading (as does Christine.) Personally I'd read it with much more cadence. Perhaps I'll have a go, and send you my take?

But it's a good poem for all that. And a good journal.

Not in bad company either!

Philip

PS

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaor last night’s lovers,
and they are rarely satisfied

is a pretty fine enjambment, IMO.

P